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| This kind of sentence will elicit nothing more than a snigger from a reader and you'll cringe when you re-read it in the cold hard light of day, when your hard-on/wet patch has disappeared They look pretty to start off with, decorating your sentences so nicely, clarifying exactly what you mean [/i] I struggled to make even that small paragraph comprehensible and I still ended up with 3 her's and 3 she's ' Make it that they meet and he's a criminal and she's a bounty hunter (Sorry, just been reading Janet Evanovitch) Which brings us on to: A lot of people complain about difficulties getting characters to fall into bed Now put that into your writing Everyone has their own sick little fantasy and a lot of the readers on Lit are probably waiting for someone to write their own personal one Right, so his hand is on her breast, while her hand is on his dick and his other hand is squeezing her arse while simultaneously rubbing her clit If you write in third person (he, she, it) then a lesbian threesome will result in a large number of 'she's, 'her's and name repetitions AFAIK, this is a Yank football term, but it fits quite well here Time to find out Regard: [i]"Tessa ran her hand over Bethany's breast, stroking her nipple The most important thing to describe is how things feel Think about how much fun you get from undressing someone There are so many synonyms for dick and pussy that it can be difficult to choose which ones to use Then he kissed her neck, his lips slowly sliding down towards her chest, licking and sucking his way down her body The skill is all in the disguise 'I wonder what she'd look like without the bra,' he wondered Think about the pace of your sex scene To paraphrase an infamous Author's Hangout saying: it's all just Tab A into Slot B in the end It's easier to work with if only one of your characters is actually doing anything I've written stories about the consequences of sex with a Satyr, with an insane witch, with a girl who's been given into slavery by her husband and about masturbation with a complete stranger on an airplane She groaned and put her hands on his back This is where sudden tone jumps and stilted writing come in It is a bit of a difficult skill to get inside the heads of your characters, but well worth the effort of learning The biggest thing wrong with a lot of the stories on Lit is that there doesn't seem to be a reason for the character to be having sex Don't forget to vote and don't forget to go and read all the rest of my stories :D Whatever you do, don't switch without a very good reason The British team is looking very good this year, don't you think Bob? One of the more frequent mistakes that can be seen in Lit stories is the play-by-play Not to be tried at home They write the background easily, but their characters don't seem to want to play and in fact resist getting together Which would you rather read? He ran his hand over her breast, squeezing it gently or She shuddered as his hand ran over her breast This is where the writer tells us exactly what the characters are doing, like he's a sports commentator giving radio coverage of the sex It's disconcerting Don't stop in the middle of a sex scene She bit her lip and moaned in ecstasy You don't have to worry about where the hands are going until you're nicely warmed up Are you writing a hard and fast rape scene? Or a slow and sensuous seduction A helpful hint for getting out of this predicament is to get rid of one of the sets of hands until you get in the mood He moved his other hand onto her hips, his fingers sliding inside her knickers This may sound like a bit of an impossible request for those who type one-handed, but if you can last until the end of the scene, then it'll flow a lot better… I think I'll rephrase that "You two look so hot," she said If you want to scream abuse/thank me/propose, then as always I can be reached at the address in my profile Roughly Adverbs are the tool of the devil Eg Beware of this and try to spice up your work by telling us something apart from what their hands are doing Harry marvelled at how such a small piece of clothing could make her look so sexy Add something that'll make your story stand out in the crowd Start off by having him eat her out, or by her giving him a blowjob and you'll find it a hell of a lot easier The Earl People react better to realistic characters and the best way of making your characters real is by telling us what they're thinking Never forget to undress your characters Almost every author at some point has trouble writing sex scenes If you start off with vagina and penis, don't switch to cunt and cock halfway through People don't want to hear what your character is doing, they want to hear what it feels like Sex is such a transcendent experience that it almost defies words Slowly Play-by-plays can be identified by lots of sentences starting with he did this, she did that If you're writing about a sadistic rapist, then he'd probably use the words cunt, dick and rack Whenever you stop in the middle of a sex scene, then you'll probably come back to it in a completely different mood to when you left Other variants include having her masturbate for him or using the perennial favourite sex-toy: handcuffs We don't get why, we don't get what either of them are thinking, they're just straight in there Sometimes that's half the fun Don't just have 'they meet, they shag, they fall asleep in each other's arms So how are you supposed to write about it then? Fear not, for I have scoured the forums to bring you the wisdom of the ages! And by that I mean I read what Weird Harold said on the subject I hope this helps Well it's a good start for the young lad from Britain, don't you agree Bob? For those of you just coming in from work, we've just seen a beautiful bit of play to get her bra off and now, I think he's going to try and get his lips on her nipple Waves of excitement flooded through her body as he squeezed gently I'm still waiting for someone to write the one with the credit-cards, the instant drying superglue and the small Panamanian dwarf named Tuscaloosa… But I digress But then, they start taking over until every sentence has your character doing things softly and gently and slowly Avoid lesbian threesomes He ran his hands over the upper hemisphere of her breast and used his fingers to tease her nipple Never be afraid to be different Happy writing ' This is also a superb opportunity to add in a little description You may think that the inside of your mind is not fit to see the light of day, but trust me, there is much worse out here on the internet Never be afraid to write exactly what you're thinking about – there's probably someone out there who'll worship you for writing the story that he/she's been waiting for Be very careful with adverbs or they'll eat you alive Make sure you tell the reader what your characters are thinking It's all just Tab A into Slot B It can be very hard to keep up with what all of your characters are doing and you may end up putting your characters into an anatomically impossible situation or writing a play-by-play to ensure that everyone knows where the hands are If you're writing about an innocent virgin who's decided to experiment for the first time, then she'd use the words vagina, penis and breasts Tailor your vocabulary to your characters Think about why your characters are supposed to be shagging If you're struggling with a sex scene, then it may be because you have too many hands wandering around the place Some writers just strip their characters down in one sentence, something like 'They ripped off each other's clothes,' but I find it so much more fun to undress them slowly Softly She started off the story with vagina and then moved onto pussy She could feel herself getting wetter as she watched the two girls caress Try not to be creative with euphemisms A brother walks in on his sister undressing and suddenly they're both fucking like rabbits Jenna watched, as Tessa's hand ran over her body This sounds like a stupid thing to have to remind you of, but it is very useful Mention things like: 'Her lacy white bra was a sharp contrast to the dusky skin of her breasts They could be your last If you liked this one, then try having a look at The 10 Commandments (in my profile) Choose two or three which you think fit the pace and characters of your scene and then stick to them Make yours different Choosing the right words can make a scene flow just that little bit better Gently And lastly: |
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